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The picture vividly portrays a thought—provking sence in which there are so many cars on the crowded road that they can not move any more, then drivers fall asleep when trapped in the situation. Obviously, it goes without saying that the picture aims at revealing a common and seriously and common phenomenon: traffic jams are prevailing nowadays.
The following reasons may be contribute to the phenomenon. firstly, some businessmen short of occupational principles, in order to save cost and make profit, overtaking is still frequently detected, regardless of life healthy. Secondly, with development of economic and technologic ,more and more people have all forms of automobiles, which result in frequently traffic jams. therefore , traffic jams are like epidemic disease that spreads fast and will destroy the whole traffic system if not cured in time.
Considering the above analysis , we should adopt efficient and positive measures to prevent the situation from deterorating .

The picture vividly portrays a thought—provking sence (sense) in which there are so many cars on the crowded road that they can not move (forward) any more, then drivers fall asleep when trapped in the situation (in the traffic). Obviously, it goes without saying that the picture aims at revealing a common and seriously (serious) and common (remove) phenomenon: traffic jams are prevailing nowadays.
The following reasons may be contribute to the phenomenon. firstly (First), some businessmen short of occupational principles, in order to save cost and make profit, overtaking is still frequently detected, regardless of life healthy (this whole sentence, from some businessmen, is wrong. You need to re-word it). Secondly (Second), with development of economic (economy) and technologic (technology) ,more and more people have all forms of automobiles, which result in frequently (frequent) traffic jams. therefore , traffic jams are like epidemic disease(s) that spreads (spread) fast