帮忙看看留学推荐信写的如何

Dear sir:
It gives me a great pleasure to recommend Mr.li, one of my favorite students. Mr.li will graduate from automobile transportation Department at Tianjin University of Technology and Education.
I have known him impressed me with his penetrating mind. After class he visited me to discuss his questions. It’s true that I know him quite well. He is hardworking, honest and ambitious. His overall grade ranked in the super five percent of his class.
During the internship, Mr.li demonstrated an impressive ability in vehicle construction, such as proper wheel alignment, automotive break performance testing and traffic flow analysis. He always proposed new ideas and could resolve problems by himself. I am quite satisfied with him.
I’m pleased to learn that he is seeking admission to advanced studies at your university. I do believe he has made a right decision and he will benefit a great deal. Your favorable consideration of his application will be greatly appreciated.

在推荐时不会使用Mr
这是最大的问题
i have known him impressed me
这一句文法有问题
改成
His penetratubg mind has always being impressing to me.

这句也有问题
After class he visited me to discuss his questions.
典型的中式英文
He usually wisit me to discuess about his questions after class.

这句的super很奇怪
His overall grade ranked in the super five percent of his class.
用top five应该就可以

learn不是这样用
I’m pleased to learn that he is seeking admission to advanced studies at your university.
pleased to know应该会比较好
还有seeking这样用不太好, 用applying advanced studies会比较好

a great deal的用法也是怪怪的...
and he will benefit a great deal
a lot应该就ok...虽然用a lot不够formal...

Your favorable consideration...你宝贵的考虑..
中文是没问题啦...
英文就会怪怪的
不过我还没想到该怎么改..

will be greatly appreciated
对方不用你去appreciate...
不过还是没想到该怎改...

If further information regarding this promising student
promising student?