精通英语的帮俺批改下面文章谢谢

错误1.“1969 year”中的“year”应去掉，没有这个用法。
2.第二句时态应为现在完成时而非过去完成时，因为没有过去时作为参照点。
3. 还是第二句，介词“at”应为“in”。
4. 第四句中“fine”最好改为“nice”但无错误。
5. 第七句为什么要用被动态？
6. antlonger是什么单词？longer还是什么？应该是any longer吧！
另外，在第五句后加“too”，并把第四句的“，”改为“。”，最后一句“to come here”改为“here”会更好的！
文章写得还不错。

Welcome to East Beach.This beach was opened in 1969. Now it is the best beach in America.Sand of East Beach is fine.Water of East Beach is blue and clean.Sun illuminates this golden beach.Do you want to come here? Do not wait any longer! Take the No.4 bus to here to have a good time!

East Beach
Welcome to East Beach.This beach had been opened since 1969. Now it is the best beach in America.Sand there is fineand Waterthere is blue and clean.Sun blazed down on this golden beach.Do you want to come here? Do not wait any longer! Take the No.4 bus here to have a good time!
请参考，个人改的！觉得简短些好！

had been ------ was
be waiting-------- wait