帮帮一句英文修改

你是想说“人类理想的居住环境要有宜人的气候，好社区，并能提供好的机遇。”对吗？
我认为你的句子主要问题是不简练，在有就是逻辑关系不明确。由于，思维方式的不同，一般老外说话都比较有逻辑，这一点是做到把英语练到地道的重要一点。
虽然，说了一些你的不足，但是，都是比较浅薄的，希望对你有帮助。我的水平也是半斤八两，我也写个句子，互相学习吧。
An ideal place for living must has a mild climat, a good enviroment,which can also provide great opportunities.

People would like to live with mild climate , good community and great opporunities.

Mild climate, a good community, and providing great opportunities are three indispensable characteristics of an ideal place for people to live.

An ideal place to live is where there is a good community holding great opportunities and the climate is mild as well.