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题目：针对在校大学生是否应该参加网上课程，进行讨论。
More and more on-campus undergraduates prefer online courses .We have a heated discussion about whether they should attend online courses .
On one hand ,some people prefer online study ,because there are so many knowledges on the net that they don’t know .In this way ,they can learn what they can’t learn in school .What’s more ,online study is more convenient than school study ,not only we can choose the time we are free ,but also can we make a choice about what we want to learn that ‘s more independent .More over ,through surfing the internet we can reach the society ,the real world ,that’s what we can’t learn at school.
On the other hand ,the other people have different points .For example ,some people think learn from internet will be harmful to our quality ,especially the communication quality .Otherwise ,it’s hard for us to communicate with teachers and classmates in time if we learn on the net .So they think it’s a good choice to learn at
More and more on-campus undergraduates prefer online courses .We have a heated discussion about whether they should attend online courses .
On one hand ,some people prefer online study ,because there are so many knowledges on the net that they don’t know .In this way ,they can learn what they can’t learn in school .What’s more ,online study is more convenient than school study ,not only we can choose the time we are free ,but also can we make a choice about what we want to learn that ‘s more independent .More over ,through surfing the internet we can reach the society ,the real world ,that’s what we can’t learn at school.
On the other hand ,the other people have different points .For example ,some people think learn from internet will be harmful to our quality ,especially the communication quality .Otherwise ,it’s hard for us to communicate with teachers and classmates in time if we learn on the net .So they think it’s a good choice to learn at
第四行中in this way指代不明确；
第九行中，非限定性定于从句要用which;
第十行，on the other hand 已经表示另一方面了，最好不要用different points,而应直接说出他们的观点，如网上学习是有害的之类；
最后最好在总结一下网上学习的优缺点，否则文章不够完整。