这样写英语信对吗？

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/26 11:48:10
Dear Tom:
Hello! I am your China's movie fans.I'm 14 years old. I "Harry Potter" start from yours first to pay attention to you, you develop amvery natural. You now certainly very busy, photography certainly very laborious,also certainly interesting, the present England is cold? Paysattention to the body!
Love,
XXX
我的原文是这样的：
亲爱的汤姆：
你好！我是你中国的一位影迷，我14岁。我从你的第一部“哈利波特”就开始关注你，你演的很自然。
你现在一定很忙，拍摄一定很辛苦，也一定有趣，现在的英国冷吗？注意身体！
用工具翻译出来的，不知道对不对，希望大家帮助我在翻译一下，谢谢了！

一般在信里不用Hello!第一句话你可以这样说:I am so glad to write to you!
晕.你的问题太多了!我看我帮你写一个
Dear Tom,

I am so glad to write to you!I am your movie fan from China.I have paid attention on you since your first movie "Harry Potter".In that movie,you acted very naturally.You must be very busy now.And making photos is a hard work,right?
But,I think that's so interesting!Britain is so cold at present,isn't it?So take care of yourself!

Yours sincerely,
XXX

呃，果然还是勉强了些。你的英语还要好好学啊，错误很多，这样的信英国人是看不懂的……

语法错了好多（China's movie fans,present England is cold)
像是翻译软件写出来的：
I Harry Potter start from yours
pay attention to you
photography very laborious
Pay attention to the body(注意那个尸体）
不过他看了这个一定会高兴一整天。
加油

确实错误有点多。..:)...这是改完的。.

Dear Tom:
Hello! I am a Chinese fan of yours, and 14 years old. It is the wonderful movie Harry Potter let me firstly pay attention to you, in which you acted extreme