麻烦看一下语法/词汇错误

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/06/20 01:11:36
I remember the first time I rode bike.My mother bought a
bike for my 5 years old birthday,It's a wonderful bike I
never seen,and I still storage it.

At that time,Even though I don't know how to rode it,but
I really wanted to try.So I went to square with my own
bike.when I arrived at square.I began rode my bike,I plaued
very slow,when I thought I can control it,I increased my
speed.I rode faster and faster,I thought I was a blade
can cut the wind.No one can stop me.

But the weather was bad.the rain came,I played very happy
regardless of the rain.I still riding.Because of I rode
too fast,and the rain became heavy,I can't control my bike.
Acturally,I was fallen down.But I felt very happy.I can
rode bike!

whole of my body got wet.So I had to go home.I was so
excited and forgot the pain I made.That's my unforgettable
event in my memory.

呵呵，有一些小问题。
主要的几个，楼主有几个can忘记改成could了
从句没有加连接词，
大小写没有注意
句号和逗号没有注意
though和but
还有，楼主一个actually拼错了（也许是我不知道新词，不过我实在想不出acturally是个什么词，如果改错了，请告知）。
楼主问的是语法，所以我没有改动用词。
看看行不行：)

I remember the first time I rode a bike.My mother bought a
bike for my 5 years old birthday,It was a wonderful bike I had
never seen,and I still store it.

At that time,even though I didn't know how to ride it,
I really wanted to try.So I went to a square with my own
bike.When I arrived at the square，I began to ride my bike.
I stepped very slow at first,and when I thought I could control it,I increased my speed.I rode faster and faster,as I thought I was a blade which can cut the wind.No one could stop me.

But the weather was bad.The rain came,while I played very happy regardless of the rain.I kept riding.Because I rode too fast,and the rain became heavy,I couldn't control my bike.
Actually,I fell down. B