这封简短的英文情书有没语法错误????

Darling,
I want to tell you, you light up my life.
I'm glad (that) I can fall in love with the man like you . Our love makes my world go round.
You are like a dream comes true...
Your better half.

错了。这样改。
Darling,
I want to tell you, you light up my life.
I'm glad I am falling in love with the man like you.Our love makes my world go around.
You are like a dream I want to come true...
Your better half.

Daring,
I want to tell you,
you light up my life,
I'm glad that I falling in love with you.
Our love makes my world go round.
loving you, just like a dream come true,
you better half...

有

I want to tell you,
I'm glad that I can fall in love...

后面的我都不知道怎么改了。。。

.......错了好多 最基本的can后面加动词原形还在错。只能按词猜意思

I want to tell you, you light up my life.
I'm glad I can fall in love with a man like you.Our love makes my world go round.
You