帮忙修改一篇英语作文

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Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to
write a composition on the topic: A Letter to the University
President about the Canteen Service on Campus You should write
at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline
given in Chinese below:
假设你是李明，请你就本校食堂的状况给校长写一封信，内容应涉及食堂的饭菜质量、价格、环境、服务等，可以是表扬，可以是批评建议，也可以兼而有之。
以下是一个人根据题目写的作文,请高手帮忙修改以下,最好能说明下英文信的格式
Dear headmaster:
When I came here last September I was very happy!But to my surprise,the price of the diet was
too high! As a poor student who came from the falling behind village, I could not support myself in many areas especial in diet .
On the other hand ,the service of staffs was too bad .Their experessions were unfriendly
,the bad qualities and few quantities often makes us be full when we saw them.What's more , the enviro

Dear headmaster:
When I came here last September,(when 或 while在句首 一定要有逗号隔开，句中倒不用） I was very happy!But I just found out that price of the diet was too high!(你那句看不懂 这句意为 我才发现…）On the one hand,(和下面对应起来） as a poor student who came from the falling behind village, I could not support myself in many areas especial in diet . On the other hand ,the service of staffs was too bad .Their experessions were unfriendly ,the bad qualities and few quantities often makes us be full when we saw them.What's more , the environment of having dinner also affect our desire of eating and be bad for our healthy. In a word,there wasn't one good point in our dining room.As headmaster ,it's your responsibility to change the situation.All of us are always waiting for you to improve it. I stand for them to thank you very much!
yours' student
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