UC知道请英语高手帮帮忙看看有什么不妥
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(Good evening, everyone.) My name is Shawn. I’m a nine-year-old boy. Last year, I entered for this contest and won the third prize. At the time I told myself that I would come back again and do better. And now, you see, I’m really here, this time I will recite the New Concept english the third. But even if I failed, I will try my best. During last year, I have read a large number of interesting English books like the last of the Mohicans, the tragedy of Dr Faustus, Robin Hood, Hamlet, Robinson Crusoe and so on. These made me crazy about English. I have become a program fan now. I love programming Turbo Pascal, Flash and Delphie7. My dream is to be a computer programmer like Bill Gates. This is me, a lovely and brilliant boy. Thanks everyone!
新概念第三册， 用英语怎么说？
(Good evening, ladies and gentlemen.) My name is Shawn. I’m a nine-year-old boy. I was very lucky to participate in this contest and won the third place in the last year. At that time I told myself that I would come back again and do the better. And now, just as you see, I’m here, this time I will recite the New Concept english book 3. no matter I fail or not , I will try my best. During last year, I have read a large numbers of interesting English books ,such as the last of the Mohicans, the tragedy of Dr Faustus, Robin Hood, Hamlet, Robinson Crusoe and so on. These made me be crazy about English. And I have the interesting in the program of computer. I love programming Turbo Pascal, Flash and Delphie7. My dream is to be a computer programmer like Bill Gates. This is me, a lovely and smart boy. Thank you!
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