大家评评这篇文章有哪些 表达上语法上的不足

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/06/06 18:53:08
I got up very early in order to download a New Oriental data.When I have the document in my computer, I found that it can not be opened. How sad I was.It took me nealy fourty minute to find a software to suit the document. From the experience, I learned that searching in internet is a skillful job.

首先我得说这是一篇很汉化的英文.
in order to 表达的因果关系还是比较强的,直接用TO 就好了啊.
DATA是不可数名词吧,而且基本上也不这样用啊, 就用 SOME NEW ORIENTAL MATERIALS
后面一句是计算机语言了,普通人在写这些的时候应该尽量避免用到那些专业的术语

FORTY MINUTES,这样的错误一旦被看到,整个作文就降一大档次,真的

When I had the ...
fourty minute 应该是forty minutes
I learned that searching in internet was a skillful job
注意下你的时态噢..不怎么一致