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Ture happiness
Everyone have their great happiness,of course ,it's all about love.Some people say that:Happiness takes no account of time.But it's my happiness is different.So please let me explain the reason to you:
I broned in Harbin and my father went to GuangZhou when I am only one year old .Then when I was just 5 years'old we moved to ShenZhen,but my father had to stay in Harbin for one year again!And now,my father works in QingDao but my mother and I still live in ShenZhen.He can be back only three months a time and just stay for a few days.
But in those few days I fell really happy ang that'my happiness.
this kind of happiness costs time but it's real happiness!!
谢谢！
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Happiness is the umbrella on your mother's hand when it' raining;happiness is your father'protecting hands;happiness is when you kwon that your wife or husband is waiting for you for dinner;happiness is when your childre

Ture happiness
Everyone have their great happiness,of course ,it's all about love.Some people say that:Happiness takes no account of time.But （去掉it's） my happiness is different.So改成then please let me explain the reason to you:
I （加上was) broned in Harbin (and改成，but) my father went to GuangZhou when I (am改成was) only one year old .(Then改成However,) when I was just 5 years'old we moved to ShenZhen,(去掉but，改成except） my father(+who) had to stay in Harbin for one year (去掉again）!（And now改成At present),my father works in QingDao (but改成while) my mother and I still live in ShenZhen.He can be back only three months a time and just stay for a few days.
But in those few days I fell really happy (看不懂ang )that'my happiness.
this kind of happiness costs time but it's real happiness!!(No matter how short the happiness lasts,I reall enjoy it which is the real one.)

译文：
真正的幸福
每个人都有自己重要的幸福的事，所有的幸福都是关于爱的。有些人说：幸福不在乎时间的流逝，但是我的幸福却与此不同，请让我解释给你听。
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