各路豪侠可不可以帮我挑挑这篇英语自我的毛病！急用！！！

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/04 06:29:46
Good morning !
It is really my honor to have this opportunity for this compete.I hope I can make a good performance today. I'm confident that I can succeed.
Now i will introduce myself briefly
I’m a student in the No.9 middle school. A school famous for foreign language. I’m a optimistic girl,I can smile almost in every situation. I believe everything eventually will goes well.I’m a honest girl .I never tell a lie. I think this is one of my advantages.I interest in reading ,swimming , running,surfing to the internet and play piano .When I feel tired , I often play piano to relax myself . Of all the things I like sleeping.You know,the students in China are always short of sleeping time. En,I admit I am a girl who isn’t very diligence, but when I make up my mind to do somethings ,I believe that I can concentration in it.
This is me,a girl don’t prefect but honey girl . that all. Thanks.
这是我要参加比赛的稿子~~~多提提意见也好

.....用I 太多了，注意语法。
I’m a（是an) optimistic girl
有些废话
I’m a honest girl .I never tell a lie. 两句意思一样。
（我很诚实，我从不撒谎）
不如你先用中文打稿再翻成英文，你的文章有点怪怪的。

Good morning everyone!
It is my real honor to have this opportunity taking part in this competition.I will try my best and I believe I can win!
Let me introduce myself briefly to you:
I come from No.9 Middle School, which is famous for foreign language teaching. I’m a optimistic girl,I can smile almost in every situation. I believe everything eventually will goes well.I’m honest.I never tell lies. I think this is one of my advantages.I interested in reading ,swimming , running,surfing on the Internet and playing piano .When I feel tired , I often play piano to relax myself . I like sleeping most.You know,the students in China are always short of sleeping. Well,I admit that I am not very diligence, but I can be absorbed when I make up my mind to deal with somethings.
This is me,a girl who is not p