评价一下我写的一篇英语短文,意见中肯马上给分

来源:百度知道 编辑:UC知道 时间:2024/05/21 15:03:03
Nowadays,no one can deny that honesty is a traditional quality of individuals.According to a recent survey that there are growing profiteers in the mordern society.

As an example, an unfavorable affair happened to Mr and Mrs Zhang.One day,they went shoppiing in the street.There happened to be a shop stand selling off the shoes.Mr Zhang didn’t trust it,so that he passed away quickly. However, Mrs went to buy it.

Unluckily, they found it was a sboddy product when they had arrived home.Consequently,they hurried to shop stand.Despite they found it,the profiteer had already run away.

So we an make a conclusion that we should be careful when we intent to buy something in such plance,or.you will be cheated.

1.According to a recent survey that there are growing profiteers in the mordern society.

不是一个句子that there are growing profiteers in the mordern society. 是附属成分

2.a shop stand selling off the shoes改成a shop selling shoes

3.so that he passed away quickly.去掉that

4.Mrs went to buy it. 注意,前面的shoes,后面要用them

5.they hurried to shop stand加the在shop前面,stand不要了,累赘

6.So we an make前面是can吧?

7.we intent to buy something in such plance,or.you will be cheated.

intent改intend,plance改places,or改otherwise,后面不要标点了.