UC知道我写的英语自我介绍,各位帮忙修改下......
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Hello everyone.My name is Mai and my English name is Nancy.I’m a 12 years old girl.I from DongGaoDi number two Primary School.I was born in November 10.1994.I have a lots Hobbies,such as piano,drawing,computer and reading.I like animals very much, such us rabbits,cats and dogs.I think animal in our best friend.So we will love them. My favorite sports is swimming.My favorite food is pizza.There are three people in my family,my parents and I.My mather is a work.She likes handwriting and cooking.My father is a worker too.He likes football and fishing.They are very kind of me.I love my parents.I like smile very much.I have a drem.I’m looking forward to become a Olympic Games volunteer in 2008.I will study English harder.
It’s me.A kindly,friendly and lovely girl.
本人刚小学毕业,英语水平不怎么样,请多指点下..因为是老师的作业,所以我想尽量写好.
My father is a worker too.He likes football and fishing.They are very kind of me.I love my parents.
把这句改一下你看会不会好一点，
my father also is a worker, he likes playing footbll and fishing.they love me very much,and i love them,too.
I like smile very much.I have a drem这句就不用了。
.I will study English harder改成：and so i will study English harder
希望给你的建议能有帮助
整体都比较不错，加油。
第一行a 12 years girl应该为a 12-year-old girl
第二行I was born in 应该为 born on
第二行a lots应该为lots of 或a lot of
先改到这里吧，呵呵
Hello everyone.My name is Mai and my English name is Nancy.I’m a 12-year-old girl.I am from the second DongGaoDi Primary School.I was born on November 10.1994.I have a lot of hobbies,such as playing the piano,drawing,playing the computer game and reading.I also like animals very much, ecpesially i like rabbits,cats and dogs.I think the animal is the best friend of human. So we should love them. My favorite sports is swimming. and my favorite food