UC知道请问教高考的老师一篇英语作文，20分满分，能的几分？
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第二段第一句为：I have some suggestions for solving this problem.
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Near-sightedness is a serious problem among the youth of our country.It is no exaggerating to say that the importance of protecting our eye sight can never be over emphasized.We new generation feel obliged to be aware of this phenomenon,for the number of the people who wear glasses is dramatically rocketing.
I have some suggestions for solving this problem. For one thing,the developing of the material world never fail to fascinate our new generation.Watching tv and playing pc games occupy a lot of time of us and make it easier to destroy our eyesight.Therefore,we should on no acount reduce the time of watching tv.For another,there might be something wrong with our education.The students have too much homework to do everyday.And impede the protection of our eye sight.So,maybe the government should carr
写的很好 应该是在一档
要多用句式 比如倒装NEVER DID ...高级词汇 比如BACK要用BACIKLE 词组 等 建议你去听听新东方的课
我没仔细看文章 感觉不错
have some suggestions for solving this problem. For one thing,the developing of the material world never fail to fascinate our new generation.Watching tv and playing pc games occupy a lot of time of us and make it easier to destroy our eyesight.Therefore,we should on no acount reduce the time of watching tv.For another,there might be something wrong with our education.The students have too much homework to do everyday.And impede the protection of our eye sight.So,maybe the government should carry out some approaches to solve such a problem.Last but not least,efforts should be made to protect our eyesight.
16分~
句子结构还算完整.
词组的运用率高
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