看看这句英语对不对，不对，应该怎么改

their melodic music is floating like a quiet stream deep inside my heart

修改如下：

Their melodic music is flowing like a quiet stream deep in my heart.

不对，缺少谓语。把动词改成谓语形式。
floating --- floated

Their melodic music floating like a quiet stream is inside my heart deeply.

Their melodic music is floating like a quiet stream deep inside my heart!