大哥帮忙改篇英语作文啊(急)

来源:百度知道 编辑:UC知道 时间:2024/05/11 01:45:18
Nowadys,the phenomenon of dishonesty in our society are very common.The purpose of these behaviors.I think, are mostly for their own profits .For instance,some businessman sell fake good to make money.Sometimes,to promote sales,they sell some products at a discount to attract more consumers on purpose.Bessides,in many cases,we ourselves may tell little lies amony our friends,even though they are our best friends.What's the worse, despite of the patients' safety,a number of doctors use medicine which is not available to add their profits.So,these people would not be trusted any longer by others as the vesult of their drshonesty.
IN my views, it pays to be honesty.You will benefit from your honesty and you'll be an example of the society if you are honest.So, just do.I believe that you will gain a lot.

水平不高,权当自己学习了,希望有所借鉴
1:Nowdays
2:phenomenon和are不搭,建议改为复数形式phenomena,are改为is不十分建议
3:behavior不能加s变复数
4:purpose跟后面are不搭,purpose一般用单数,何况此处的逻辑意思是“很多行为有一个目的”,一个目的还用复数干嘛
5:good->goods
6:promote sales是错的,sales是形容词,可以用get sales promotion等
7:水平有限in many cases,we ourselves may tell little lies amony our friends,even though they are our best friends不解其意.
我个人理解成“一些案件中我们自己也许会在朋友间说谎,即便他们是最好的朋友”,那样的话应该是a little
8:What's worse,
9:despite of 是“尽管”,我个人不解怎么后面跟“病人的安危”."in spite of "是“不管”的意思建议使用in spite of
10:用my view is或IN my opinions吧