UC知道急!!!!!帮忙修改下雅思写作,面临考试希望好心人给点意见
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TASK ONE
The graph indicates that the percentage of the population aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040 in USA.SWEDEN and Japan..
In 1940,the most population aged 65and over was USA which was nearly 10 percent. The followed was Sweden for about 7%.The last one was Japan which was half of USA. Between 1940 and 2000,the proportion of population of USA and Sweden was steadly increased, whereas ,in contrast ,the population of Japan was decrease.
From years 2000 to years 2030. There are great changes. The amount of population of Japan and Sweden is rised shaply, especially, the percentage of Sweden reach the peak at 20% in the year of 2010.However the rate of USA is down to 14%.
AT the last decade, the population of three countries is increase rapidly . Japan is the most population (27%).the subsequent is Sweden(25% ),the last one is USA(23%).
TASK TWO
With the arrival of knowledge and economy age, an increasing number of students are admitance to colleg
The graph indicates that the percentage of the population aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040 in USA.SWEDEN and Japan..
In 1940,the most population aged 65and over was USA which was nearly 10 percent. The followed was Sweden for about 7%.The last one was Japan which was half of USA. Between 1940 and 2000,the proportion of population of USA and Sweden was steadly increased, whereas ,in contrast ,the population of Japan was decrease.
From years 2000 to years 2030. There are great changes. The amount of population of Japan and Sweden is rised shaply, especially, the percentage of Sweden reach the peak at 20% in the year of 2010.However the rate of USA is down to 14%.
AT the last decade, the population of three countries is increase rapidly . Japan is the most population (27%).the subsequent is Sweden(25% ),the last one is USA(23%).
TASK TWO
With the arrival of knowledge and economy age, an increasing number of students are admitance to colleg
不是什么高手，考过几次雅思
仅作参考 呵呵
小作文开头介绍一般用一般现在时，后面的几段全部都用过去时态
From years 2000 to years 2030 去掉years
There are great changes are改为were
第8行 is rised 改为 was rising reach 改为reached 等都改为过去时
TASK two
我觉得第一段就先表明自己的观点最好！！应该加上My opinion is that...然后再进行讨论
再有是句子有几个经典从句就行，不要求太长，但要求准确
第3行 subjects
the proportion of male and female is not equal of the numbers of male and female students 比例和数字不能作比较
偶是考托的，好像跟雅思思路不大一样……
祝你好运！