大大们帮我看看我的信这么写行么?

我给寄宿家庭写的介绍信,帮我改改!谢了.
原文:很高兴能够成为你们家庭中的一员。我从小在北京长大，这是我第一次出国学习。我从小酷爱京剧艺术，如果你们感兴趣我可以和你们多多交流。我知道我们两国在文化和生活上存在很多差异，希望你们能够与我多交流、多指导。愿我们能够和睦相处。
12月29日下午4点我会到你们家，我们到时见。

英文:I will be very glad for staying your family. From childhood I grew up in Beijing, this is my first time overseas study. I love Beijing Opera art from an early age, if you are interest in it we can exchanges much more. I know that there are many differences between our two countries in culture and life, so I hope we can exchanges often and you can guide and tell me how to do and how to say. I believe that we will live together in harmony.
At 16:00 on December 29, I will get your home, when we will see.

括号里是我建议的写法，希望有帮助
1,I will be very glad for staying your family.
(It's my great pleasure for staying with your family.)
2,From childhood I grew up in Beijing, this is my first time
overseas study.
(I have grown up in Beijing and it is my first time study
overseas.)
3,I love Beijing Opera art from (since) early age, if you are
interest in it we can exchanges much more.
(we can share our opinions with each other if you are
interested)
4,I know that there are many differences between our two
countries in culture and life, so I hope we can exchanges
often and you can guide and tell me how to do and how to
say.
(Since the many differences between our two countries from
culture and living, I hope that we can communicate
often.)
5,I believe that we will live together in harmony.
6,At 16:00 on December 29, I will get your home, when we will