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Dare to Play Your Role!
I still remember one of the football matches in my heart,which I consider to be a significant step towards my life goal
It was on a Wednesday afternoon,time for physical activites.With thick snow on the playground ,we decide to play football.And Class 8,whiche wa siad to be the No.1 football class ,suggested playing a match with us.To tell the truth ,I didn't chriesh any hope for my class.My classmates were the smartest 23 of the grade,what they do all day was siting there,studying all day .I used to be a linebacker before I came to this class three weeks ago .Compared to them I was rather professial.
Two teachers agreed to be judgers and the match began.They were really
powerful,in just 15 minutes be sore was 2:0.Twelve of us stood in front of our gate like a wall.Sure enough ,we were underdogs,
I was very anxious to go front .But I was a linebacker,and it was the first ime we play together,if could sore any ,they would

we decide to play football.And Class 8,whiche wa siad to be the No.1 football
decide 应该改为decided
whiche wa siad to be the No.1 football
应该改为which was said
Compared to them I was rather professial
Compared to 应该改为Compared with
因为Compared to意思是把什么比作什么
而Compared with 意思是把什么和什么相比较
in just 15 minutes be sore was 2:0.
中的sore 应该是score
Twelve of us stood in front of our gate like a wall
Twelve of us改为We twelve
因为Twelve of us意思是我们中的十二个人
而 We twelve意思是 我们十二个人（全部）
and it was the first ime we play together
应该改为and it was the first time we plaied together
因为某人第一次做某事的句行是
it was the first time somebody did something
if could sore any
这句中的主语不应该省略
因为你在上面一句说的是自己
而下一句说的是他们
省略主语不好，改为if they could sore any more
So when the ball came I
quickly passed to others even I had good angles.
So when the ball came I
改为
quickly passed to others even though I had good angl