我自己写了一片英语简述,用来面试的,请各位朋友帮忙看看,有什么错误的帮我纠正

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我自己写了一片英语简述,用来面试的,请各位朋友帮忙看看,有什么错误的请帮我纠正,不用改的特别好,尽量在我原文的基础上帮我看看语法或者词性或者固定用法有些什么错误,下面是我根据我写的中文翻译的英文:

首先让我先自我介绍一下,我叫司徒海华,我出生于上海,毕业于上海电视高等专业学校,我主修的课程是会计,在2006年取得本科毕业证书。在我学习期间,我一边学习一边工作,积累了三年的工作经验,毕业后又工作了一年。迄今为止,我已有四年工作经验,我的第一份工作是会计,当然是从出纳开始做到会计,我工作的第一家公司是私营企业,经销化工产品,我在这家公司做了三年。我工作的第二家公司是国营企业,隶属与上海电信公司,是一家上市公司,我从事的工作是会计兼核对企业内部交易数据,我在这公司做了一年,由于是非正式员工,并且永远不能转为正式员工,对个人的前途发展没有保障,所以希望换一家更好的单位,既能为公司做出贡献,又能提升自身价值,让我的工作得到保障。另外,我目前正在上海外国语大学学习基础口译课程,因为我希望我的英语水平能得到提高。最后我非常希望能加入你们的团队,为企业做出贡献。

First, let me introduce myself, my name is si tu hai hua, I was born in shanghai. I graduated from shanghai TV colleges and university. I major in accounting. In the year 2006, I had undergraduate diploma, during the study, I had worked besides study, I had worked for three years at that time. Then, I have worked one year after graduate from school. So far, I have four years work experience. My first work is an accountant, of course, from cashier to accountant. The first company that I had wo

I was graduated ... this is always in passive. 不是你给自己毕业,是院校给你毕业!

in the year 2006 -> in 2006 简单就可以

i was awarded udergraduate diploma...

i had part-time jobs during my studies...

after the graduation

4-year working experiences

i worked as an accountant in my first job...

什么 personal company?private company? unlimited company?

it buys and sells (trades) chemical products...

太多了,请再看一遍

小学英语作文哦

写的很好