众亲,哪位高人可以帮我改一下personal statement?

来源:百度知道 编辑:UC知道 时间:2024/05/21 10:36:56
(有语法错误,幼稚的用词,请毫无保留地指出来,小蕃绝对虚心接受)

Being brought up in an educated family in Shenyang, a middle-size city in China, I was fortunately given the best study atmosphere. My father is an engineer of electronical and my mother is a chemist. Unceasingly, I am keen on reading books, ranging from literature masterpieces to popular science articles. Gradually, such objects as Chemistry and Biology had a special fascination to me and my knowledge as well as interest in these fields was increasing rapidly.
Apart from an outstanding study achievement, my innovative spirit and perseverance in probing academic problems made me get recognition from the fellows. If some fresh ideas stroke me and I got an unique prospective, I would give speeches (for instance, entitling ‘Environmental Protection& Our Action’, ‘Food Additive & Daily Life’) in the auditorium of our school with enthusiasm and efforts. In total, nearly 300 schoolmates and teachers have listened to my speeches. Thanks fo

I was brought up in an educated family in Shenyang, which is a middle-size city in China, and given the best environment for study. My father is an electrical engineer and my mother is a chemist.Unceasingly, I am avid on reading books, which ranging from literature masterpieces to popular science articles. Subjects such as chemistry and biology have a special fascination for me and my knowledge in these fields have had increased rapidly.
Apart from an outstanding study achievement, my innovative spirit and perseverance in probing academic problems made me get recognition from the fellows. If some fresh ideas strike me, I would have an unique perspective and I would give speeches (for instance, entitling ‘Environmental Protection& Our Action’, ‘Food Additive & Daily Life’) in the auditorium of our school with enthusiasm and efforts. In total, nearly 300 schoolmates and teachers have had listened to my speeches. I am much obliged for their supports and praise. Hence, I got more c