UC知道港大英文自述 帮忙挑错
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大家帮忙挑挑语法错误，用法不地道的等地方，或者看看能否用些复杂些的句式，高级点的单词，但不要改动内容，谢谢了！采纳了再追加50分。
以下是要求
请用英文简述报读香港大学的原因, 选择志愿的考虑及对未来的展望或其他相关的资料。(250字内)
以下是我的自述
I choose the University of Hong Kong because Hong Kong is a very international and open city,and the HKU is the best university in Hong Kong.
I prefer engineering to scientific theoris and I know the Business and Economics Faculty of HKU is very good,so I choose them.
If I can be admitted to the HKU,I think I'll study hard to get the bachelor's degree.And then I'll probably continue my study to get a master's or even a doctor's degree,at home or abroad.After my graduation,I want to work as an engineer.Working for an international bank or a business corporation is also a very good choice for me.
I think my biggest advantage is that I don't have a weak subject,no matter Maths,English,Physics or Chinese.So I'm able to do well in both engineering and economics & finance.And I think I'm
以下是要求
请用英文简述报读香港大学的原因, 选择志愿的考虑及对未来的展望或其他相关的资料。(250字内)
以下是我的自述
I choose the University of Hong Kong because Hong Kong is a very international and open city,and the HKU is the best university in Hong Kong.
I prefer engineering to scientific theoris and I know the Business and Economics Faculty of HKU is very good,so I choose them.
If I can be admitted to the HKU,I think I'll study hard to get the bachelor's degree.And then I'll probably continue my study to get a master's or even a doctor's degree,at home or abroad.After my graduation,I want to work as an engineer.Working for an international bank or a business corporation is also a very good choice for me.
I think my biggest advantage is that I don't have a weak subject,no matter Maths,English,Physics or Chinese.So I'm able to do well in both engineering and economics & finance.And I think I'm
给稍微改了这段：
I prefer engineering to scientific theories and I know Business and Economics Faculty is one of the best subjects in HKU. That's why I choose it.
If I can be admitted to the HKU 这里可以用were而不是can be，用上虚拟语气。
用词句法确实都太简单了，但是一下看也不知道该怎么改。可以不用直接按照要求的走，不用写成回答问题的形式。加上一些自己的感情，写成文章，会比较好。楼主拿给英语老师看看会比较好，比较能针对你的情况来改。还有建议说一些你在社会活动、校园活动的内容，港大对综合能力很看重，而不是单纯的学习。
用词太简单了楼主
感觉像高中水平的...
no matter Maths,English,Physics or Chinese此句话没有完整 不要使用no mater
I pride myself on my all my subjects.i dont have a weak subject that's for sure.
i can be help, if you need
请个枪手写个地道一点的
下狠心背下来
如果是面试的话
如果你想成功的话
好象没有毛病了吧