麻烦帮我看下这篇英语自我介绍有没有错?

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My name is Cathy. I’m thirteen years old .I learned from Chang Yi primary school .In the primary school , I’m a good student in the teacher's eyes .I’m a clever girl . I like to read books and sing songs .I like to study. Because it can give me much knowledge .This is me.
(有的话帮我改一下,谢谢)

I learned from Chang Yi primary school .
语法是对的，但说起来有点别扭，建议改成：
I am study in the Chang Yi primary school.

I’m a good student in the teacher's eyes .
还是很别扭，不知道是不是译成了中式英语，建议改成：
All the teachers think I am a good student.

I like to read books and sing songs .建议改成：
My hobby is reading books and singing songs.

I like to study.建议改成：I like studying.

I’m a good student in the teacher's eyes
改in teachers’opinion，I’m a good student

I like to study，Because it can give me much knowledge
Because不能独立成一句，前边必须逗号。

This is me去掉。不然破坏短文语感。暂时这些，行不？

1.I am a student from Chang Yi primary school
2.把In the primary school删掉
3.Also I like to study because it can give me much knowledge

ilearntinChangYiprimaryschool!和ilikereadingbooksandsingingsongs!like+doing表兴趣！那个是表一次的动作

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