请帮我看看这句话有没有问题

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we would like to eastablish a relationship with your university to become your enrollment agency in Jiangsu province.

感觉怪怪的,语法上有问题吗?句子结构是怎样的?
我语法不好,拜托各位了~
是不是应该把 to become your enrollment agency in Jiangsu province. 分为另一个句子?

relationship 为不可以名词，不可用 a 修饰
做/挡当……的代理应为 act as, 而非 become（变成、成为）

改为：We'd like to establish business relationship with your university to act as your agency of enrollment in JiangSu province.

我觉得满好的，找不出什么问题

we would like to eastablish a relationship with your university to become your enrollment agency in Jiangsu province.
没有问题，出现两个短语：would like to do sth；relationship with