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If a person only sees the animation but don’t make Gundam models, he isn’t a real Gundam fans. One of the most interesting things in Gundam’s world is make models by yourself. There are many different types in Gundam models, including HG, MG, PG and FG. This is my Gundam models. I’m just beginner. The expert can reform the models. They put the model in a special background and make it old and shabby, so that it looks more authentically.
For some Gundam-crazy, to buy plastic models and make it can’t satisfy them. A fan from Taiwan make a 彩灯高达. Another Chinese fan makes a paper Gundam. A Japanese fan spent three years to make a paper model Gundam. The model even has jointed arms and legs.
Just like the Star War have a strong influence on American teenagers; Gundam also exerts a great effect on Japan. A college even runs a specialist to make a stud of the social phenomenon that initiated by Gundam. There is a museum about Gundam. In the museum, there is a real size Gundam mode
For some Gundam-crazy, to buy plastic models and make it can’t satisfy them. A fan from Taiwan make a 彩灯高达. Another Chinese fan makes a paper Gundam. A Japanese fan spent three years to make a paper model Gundam. The model even has jointed arms and legs.
Just like the Star War have a strong influence on American teenagers; Gundam also exerts a great effect on Japan. A college even runs a specialist to make a stud of the social phenomenon that initiated by Gundam. There is a museum about Gundam. In the museum, there is a real size Gundam mode
你还真是一切都为了英语啊，那么，我就谈谈我的看法，希望对你有帮助。
One of the most interesting things in Gundam’s world is make models by yourself. is和make两个动词不可以连在一起用，改为is making
第二段中的举例用过去时比较好，A fan from Taiwan made……后面 Chinese fan 和 Japanese fan 做的都是paper model，可以考虑合成一句，或者把中国fan的去掉，还有a paper model Gundam不通。a paper Gundam或者a paper model或者因为上面有提到，用one代替也可以。不然显得很重复。The model even has jointed arms and legs. 因为上面提到很多model，所以用these models好一些。
你的文章中有一些短句可以考虑合在一起成为一个句子，会显得有文采，比如There is a museum about Gundam. In the museum, there is a real size Gundam model.可以写为There is a museum about Gundam，in which there is a real size Gundam model.
我很少看到有人自己用英语写动漫的，我觉得你写得很好。