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题目 Wild animals have no place in the 21st century. Some people think that preventing these wild animals from dying out is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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Nowhere in the world has the issue been so much debated than in our society. It is believed by some people that keeping the wild animals from extinction means waste of money and time. However I totally do not agree with the idea above. The reasons can be outlined as follows.
The main factor is that wild animals are previous resources which the nature gives us. For one thing, the ideas of a great many of inventions are actually enlightened by the behavior of animals. For instance, the planes were originally created because of birds. For another, wild animals may contribute to the science. Scientists have done so many experiences on animals that the results may bring numerous benefits to
总体上看文章写的不错，但要注意语法错误（一定不能出语法错误，那样你的分数会被大打折扣），还要注意文章的逻辑。
Nowhere in the world has the issue been so much debated than in our society.这句话句型用的很好，可是本句意思有些表述不清，因为our society和the world是同义。
means waste of money and time--means a waste of money and time
which the nature gives us--which nature offers us
a great many of inventions 去掉of，a great many后直接接名词复数，如果用of，那么后面的名词前应该有the，these，those，或形容词型的物主代词
the behavior of animals，behavior应该用复数，因为动物这里是复数，因而他们的行为也不是一种
the planes were originally created because of birds这句表述有问题，飞机的发明不是因为鸟，只能说是因为鸟类飞行的原理
the planes were originally created out of the flying priciples of the birds
may contribute to the science两个问题：1.may应该去掉，因为may的语气是不确定的；2.science前不应该有the
Not only for the animals and botanies, but for our human as well, and even more significant for the later.这不是一个完整的句子，因为其中没有动词，所以应该把not小写，前一个句子句号改为逗号。
Seeing so many nature disasters since the civilizatio