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Olympic and me
How does Olympic game come from ?Let me tell you.
At ancient Greece , there were a great amount of wars mount all of the cities.It brought people a lot of disaster.For peace,the kings of all the cities discussed and had made a dicision. They decide to held a sports game at the city call Olympic.Greece sports game last for a long time . The modern Olympic game began form 1896.Up till now ,the Olympic game has already held 28.
The symbolize of Olympic is make from five wreaths.It could be unicolor or it can be five kinds of colour, blue, yellow, black, green and red.The circle wreath of 5 different colors are explained the symbolizes of five greatest continents.
The 29 Olympic game is going to hold in Beijing ,China.This an exciting news for anybody in china. The slogan of Olympic in 2008 is ‘one world ,one dream’,this four words give us infinite power.I’m a member of china ,I will use the most sincere voice,
第一句时态好象就不怎么好了哦，用一般过去时应该更好些吧我想。
我最近也是在写这个哦，有时间交流交流吧。
这是我的个人空间
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。。。错误连篇。。。从单词到语法到时态。。。无力修改。。。楼主你要好好学习啊。。。
忍不住还是指出一个特大号错误：奥运会是Olympic Games，专用这个词，别把s丢了。。。而且后面要用复数
。。。跳着看了两行，“The slogan of Olympic in 2008 is ‘one world ,one dream’,this four words give us infinite power”。。。楼主啊，写着写着就忘记单复数了吧，既然是four，前面居然写this？。。。直接写these words不就行了么。还有后面的口号" Bless you, belong to beijing, belong to China, belong to our 2008!" 。。。我真是无语了，喊得挺响亮，可惜是个彻头彻尾的Chinglish，而且我还不确定我猜的意思是不是正确。。。
此外最多的错误大概就是经常性忘记时态，或者乱用时态。。。
好好学习呀T_T
"For peace,the kings of all the cities discussed and had made a dicision. They decide to held a sports game at the city call Olympic."
首先，for peace用逗号隔开就成了“because of peace因为和平”，要表达“为了和平”可以to make peace
第二，这句the kings of all the cities discussed