急.帮忙看看我的英语自我介绍有问题吗?

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Good afternoon! Ladies and Gentlemen .I am glad to be here to introduce myself.My name is Dina,I am eighteen years old. I was born and raiesd in Guangzhou.I went to the XXX School.My major is convention and exhibiton marketing.And i will be graduating this coming July.I am be interesting in Fashion.And i usually shopping on the Taobao internet.In the past, I have try to open my own shop on Taobao. I am mad on clothes.and I also buy some fashion magazines.I suppose my strengths is I am a fast-learner.I have ever worked as a clothes saleslady in XXX company.Although it's only a part time job.But I have learn a lot of about the sales job.Although I am not a university student.but I believe I can competent at this job.I wouldn't say I am brilliant,but I will try my best.Thanks for giving me such a chance for interview and I hope I can get this job sincerely.Thank you.

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Good afternoon! Ladies and Gentlemen .I am so glad to be here to introduce myself.My name is Dina,I am eighteen . I was born in Guangzhou and raiesd here(如果不是在广州做的自我介绍则用there).I am a student of *** school,my major is convention and exhibiton marketing.I will graduate from my dear school next July.I am interested in Fashional things. I always go shopping online. I had tried to open my own shop on Taobao. I like beatiful clothes very much, and I like buying some fashional magazines.I want to be a fast-learner,so i am trying my best to achieve it.I had ever worked as a fashion saleslady in XXX company.Although it's only a part-time job, I have learned a lot about saling. I am not a university student, but I believe I can competent at this job.I won't say that I am brilliant,but I will try my best.Thank you so much to give me a chance,I hope I could get this job.Thank you.

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This does not look like a self-introduction speech more lik