UC知道请评价一下这篇四级作文
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写一篇演讲稿， 1.认为自己具备了什么调教可以胜任学生会主席的工作。2. 如果当选 你将为本校学生做些什么
正文：
Dear Classmates:
I am very glad to stand here.I want to be the chairman of the student union.
I have confidence of this position.First of all,I was the assister for the last chairman of the student union.I do really know what and how to do this job better. Second I have a warm heart for this union.I enjoy to help other people.If you have trouble,you can ask for me.I will help you as possible as I could.Last but not least,My hobby is very wild.I enjoy singing,reading,writting,printing and so on.So,we will have a verity of actions for different hoppies.
If I take this position.I will thr my best for it.Giving the chance to me and I will repay the wonderful to you.
Thanks
正文：
Dear Classmates:
I am very glad to stand here.I want to be the chairman of the student union.
I have confidence of this position.First of all,I was the assister for the last chairman of the student union.I do really know what and how to do this job better. Second I have a warm heart for this union.I enjoy to help other people.If you have trouble,you can ask for me.I will help you as possible as I could.Last but not least,My hobby is very wild.I enjoy singing,reading,writting,printing and so on.So,we will have a verity of actions for different hoppies.
If I take this position.I will thr my best for it.Giving the chance to me and I will repay the wonderful to you.
Thanks
错误很多
首先，我觉得那个second应该写成secondly表示“第二”
第三行那个what是不是可以去掉，还有第四行，那个enjoy后面不应该更to吧，应该是ing格式的词。后面的ask后面不应该加for啊，不通了那样。
那个wild不对，那个“野蛮”的意思，你如果这么写那可就竞选失败无疑，应该写成wide，是“广阔”的意思。
还有，我觉得那个actions是不是改为activities好点，“活动”的意思。
用a verity of 也可以，还可以用varous
最后那个chance前面应该用a吧，不应该用the吧，这个我不太肯定。
最后一句repay后面没有宾语，因为wonderful是形容词，不能做宾语。应该加个名词性质的词。
基本上就这么些错误吧