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Long long ago there was a tale.
Two men went to see the god,they wanted to ask,"where paradise is?"But god saw they were strarving,so the god gave their a piece of meat.A man didn't said any word and bigan to eat.But the other one said,"thank you."then bigan to eat.The god only made the man said "thank you" went to the paradise.The other one was angry,"why can't you don't let me go to paradise."The god only said,"you can't say,"thank you,that let me know you don't know others love.This kind of man can't go to paradise.
There isn't a little water in the land.The land can be a piece ofdesert.There isn't "thank you" in the world.The world can be the hell.
在下初一，错多了别怪。谢谢。
zaixiandeng xiexie
1.the paradise,加定冠词
2.a man didn't say不应该said
3.why don't you let me go to paradise，不要再加can't
4.god only said ：you can't say "thank you"
5.other's love
6.there isn't water in the land
7.The god only made the man who said 'thank you' GO to the paradise.
make sb do sth “go”要用原型
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A word," Thank you"
There is a tale. （tale就已经是传说了，不需要longlongago之类）
Two men went to see the god,they wanted to ask him ,'where is paradise ?' But when god saw they were strarving,he gave their a piece of meat.One of the man didn't said any word and began to eat while the other one said,'thank you.'then began to eat. The god only made the man who said 'thank you' went to the paradise. The other one was angry,'why don't you let me go to paradise? "The god simply answered ,'you didn't say 'thank you',so that I know you don't realize o