UC知道跪求高手批改雅思作文~~~最好能给出分数~（3）
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题目：有人说竞争对学生发展好，有人说培养合作的意识更好，讨论双方观点，然后给出自己观点。
There is a prevailing issue these days that educational systems should focus on the encouragement of the sense of competition, which is said to be useful for children’s studying. However, other people claim that more attention should be paid to “co-operation” to cultivate the sense of teamwork. In my view, I believe that the two arguments are reasonable, I would given opinions from both perspectives.
Undoubtedly, it is very important to form the sense of “what is competition” and “how to compete with others” for students’ development. In modern society, competition may go through one’s life in every aspects including studying and working. It is obvious that learning how to compete with others not only do good to the establishment of individual’s faith and confidence, but also improve the quality of society and community as a whole. In fact, a better person would probably have more opportunities to survive and becomes winner i
There is a prevailing issue these days that educational systems should focus on the encouragement of the sense of competition, which is said to be useful for children’s studying. However, other people claim that more attention should be paid to “co-operation” to cultivate the sense of teamwork. In my view, I believe that the two arguments are reasonable, I would given opinions from both perspectives.
Undoubtedly, it is very important to form the sense of “what is competition” and “how to compete with others” for students’ development. In modern society, competition may go through one’s life in every aspects including studying and working. It is obvious that learning how to compete with others not only do good to the establishment of individual’s faith and confidence, but also improve the quality of society and community as a whole. In fact, a better person would probably have more opportunities to survive and becomes winner i
第一段结尾小问题given为give。
Examination, which is usually used to classified different levels, could be seen as a example.
建议去掉which is，应为an example。On the other hand, co-operation also take an essential role on student’s improvement.take改为takes，建议用play a role in。Thus, the sense of teamwork should be teach in school as well. teach改为taught。还有些问题自己琢磨下吧。感觉还可以。但还是用了些cliches。9分满分我给你5到6分。
路过,大学毕业了
可是四级没过.