UC知道一篇英语自我介绍，高手们帮我看下有没有病句之类的吧~~~~礼拜天就要用了
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today i'm honoured to have this opportunity to introduce to you about myself
my name is liushen , I am a lovely girl , i was born in qingdao , and i love qingdao
3 years ago , i went to jinan , now ,as a graduate of the e-professional students , i would not found a job suitable for me , i think i still need some studying to improve my quality
in my spare time , i have a lot of hobbies
i love to listen music, and like to read books as well
i have a harmony family
my father and mother are relax and enjoy their retirement
My parents can fully understand me
when i make mistakes , they always devote all their attention to instructing me
i love them as they love me
that's me
谢谢谢谢~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
修改的地方我会做标注，你自己看要不要用
Good morning
today i'm honoured to have this opportunity to introduce to you about myself（这句话有点怪，不过我暂时想不出怎么改，就把today放到句子的最后边把，不然有中国式英语的嫌疑）
my name is liushen , I am a lovely girl , i was born in qingdao , and i love qingdao(地名人名要大写，改成Liushen和Qingdao)
（在这里加上：I spent all my life in Qingdao, until three years ago 接上你下别写的，这样比较连贯）
3 years ago , i went to jinan（同上，首字母大写） （写上你去济南干什么了，比如说I spent three academic years in XXX university, it was a wonderful experience.之类的）. （另起一句）Now ,as a graduate of the e-professional students （不知道e-professional 什么意思 你要是说网络专家之类的可以说IT expert） , i couldn't (wouldn't 改成couldn't) find (found 改成find, 不用重复过去是)a job that suits my interests( suitable for me 改成suits my interests比较通顺), i think i still need to work harder（some studying 改成 to work harder）to improve myself (my quality 改成myself, quality 一词真的没法表达什么)
i(所有I要大写，另外我把in my spare time给删了，没什么用，加了'also')also have a lot of hobbies
i love