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不好意思,有一些错误我得帮你指出来!
[错误1]It tells us the importance of peace.
[改进1]另外这句话可以用更好的方式表达,以下是我的建议:
It makes us understood the importance of peace better.
[错误2]在你这句话中,really不可使用,因为really和hard都是副词,重复了:
He started to study English really hard.
[改进2]he had lots of difficulties 这句中,如果把had改为met效果更佳.
[你的美句]个人认为你这句写得还不错:
Tom didn’t lose heart,he hoped his country to win,only then would he have a chance to enter America. 尤其是only then would he...可算美句~
其它地方还不错,希望你能不懈努力~
hehehehehehehehehehheheheh不好意思,有一些错误我得帮你指出来!
[错误1]It tells us the importance of peace.
[改进1]另外这句话可以用更好的方式表达,以下是我的建议:
It makes us understood the importance of peace better.
[错误2]在你这句话中,really不可使用,因为really和hard都是副词,重复了:
He started to study English really hard.
[改进2]he had lots of difficulties 这句中,如果把had改为met效果更佳.
The Terminal is my favorite movie.Tom Hanks performed it.It shows us the importance of peace,and teaches us how to survive