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Michael Phelps wins 8 gold medals and makes history
Someone can be impressed by a rich assembly of ancient Chinese art and culture, the spectacular fireworks, the peaceful atmosphere on the opening ceremony; the zealous volunteers who were busy provide athletes and tourists with services; the utter speed of Usain Bolt----perhaps these are the most memorable moments from 2008 Beijing Olympic Games. However, I have chose a moment that Michael Phelps won 8 gold medals and held seven world records in swimming because he surpassed Mark Spitz, who was also a swimmer and had held the previous gold medal total with the seven that he won at the 1972 Munich Olympic Games.
Overall, Phelps has won 16 Olympic medals Phelps was born and raised in Baltimore, Maryland, and grew up in the Rodgers Forge neighborhood. In his youth, Phelps was diagnosed with Attention-Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder (ADHD). He started swimming at age seven,
您这篇文章与favorite Olympic moment的标题有点离题。文章内容介绍的是Phelps 及他的成就，而不是他在奥运夺标时你的感受,比如他险胜的精彩一幕。不过，从纯粹语法研究的角度，下面是我的意见。
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Someone can be impressed by a rich assembly of ancient Chinese art and culture, the spectacular fireworks, the peaceful atmosphere on the opening ceremony; the zealous volunteers who were busy provide athletes and tourists with services; the utter speed of Usain Bolt----perhaps these are the most memorable moments from 2008 Beijing Olympic Games. However, I have (chose a) chosen the moment that Michael Phelps won 8 gold medals and held seven world records in swimming because he surpassed Mark Spitz, who was also a swimmer and (had held the previous gold medal total with the seven) holder of seven gold medals that he won at the 1972 Munich Olympic Games.
Overall, Phelps has won 16 Olympic medals. Phelps was born and