UC知道请帮我看一下这篇文章的用词,tense,和其他错误6 (英语老师进)
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请帮我留意一下tense，word choice (这个最重要),
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does it flow well?
is it argumentative?
6th body paragraph
感谢，好的话可加分
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Although the making of Maus seems like Spiegelman’s intention to get involve in his father’s stories. Nevertheless, it is a way for Spiegelman to escape the Holocaust, the tragedy that created his postmemories. Spiegelman once said to his wife.
…I did have nightmares about S.S. men coming into my class and dragging all of us Jewish kids away… I can’t even make any sense out of my relationship with my father… how am I supposed to make any sense out of Auschwitz? …of the Holocaust (Maus II, 14)?...
Spiegelman expresses his feelings toward the postmemory directly. At one point, this expression is a complaint of being trapped under his postmemory of the Holocaust, but at another point, this is Spiegelman’s true emotion towards his relationship to it: unsure, puzzled, and confused. He is curious about i
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does it flow well?
is it argumentative?
6th body paragraph
感谢，好的话可加分
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Although the making of Maus seems like Spiegelman’s intention to get involve in his father’s stories. Nevertheless, it is a way for Spiegelman to escape the Holocaust, the tragedy that created his postmemories. Spiegelman once said to his wife.
…I did have nightmares about S.S. men coming into my class and dragging all of us Jewish kids away… I can’t even make any sense out of my relationship with my father… how am I supposed to make any sense out of Auschwitz? …of the Holocaust (Maus II, 14)?...
Spiegelman expresses his feelings toward the postmemory directly. At one point, this expression is a complaint of being trapped under his postmemory of the Holocaust, but at another point, this is Spiegelman’s true emotion towards his relationship to it: unsure, puzzled, and confused. He is curious about i
1: involved
2: delete ".Nevertheless", ie, combine the 2 sentences
3: flow, maybe say sth like "this is evident in one of Spiegelman's conversations with his wife:"
After the long quote:
3: what's "it"?
4: redundancy (puzzled and confused)
8: you used many "making"s, try something else. If it is a project, maybe production?
9: delete "when", you only need one, once or when
12:increases feeling of dislike, try something like intensifies his aversion
17: "aftereffect of the Holocaust", consider using another word.
18: same thing, the making of Maus, find another word
19: avoid using "postmemory" so many times
希望能帮助你，在microsoft word 里可以用synonyms找到一些词来代替你用的很多的词。