UC知道请帮我看一下这篇文章的用词,tense,和其他错误7 (英语老师进)
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请帮我留意一下tense，word choice (这个最重要),
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does it flow well?
is it argumentative?
first body paragraph
感谢，好的话可加分
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Throughout the book, Spiegelman suffers from his postmemory. He tries to escape. This attempts to escape even leads to his father’s escape from him. In the last page of the whole story, right after Vladek’s story ends with his reunion with his wife Anja, Vladek says to Spiegelman, “So… let’s stop, please, your tape recorder… I’m tired from talking, Richieu, and it’s enough stories for now” (Maus II, 135)… And then there is a tombstone which reads Vladek and Anja Spiegelman on it. This suggests that not only Spiegelman, Vladek is also trying to escape the Holocaust. But what he is escaping is what brought to him by Spiegelman. In the book, Vladek had said more than once that it’s Spiegelman who brings up all his memories about the Holocaust through the process of making Maus. Vladek’s request for Spiegelman to stop
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does it flow well?
is it argumentative?
first body paragraph
感谢，好的话可加分
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Throughout the book, Spiegelman suffers from his postmemory. He tries to escape. This attempts to escape even leads to his father’s escape from him. In the last page of the whole story, right after Vladek’s story ends with his reunion with his wife Anja, Vladek says to Spiegelman, “So… let’s stop, please, your tape recorder… I’m tired from talking, Richieu, and it’s enough stories for now” (Maus II, 135)… And then there is a tombstone which reads Vladek and Anja Spiegelman on it. This suggests that not only Spiegelman, Vladek is also trying to escape the Holocaust. But what he is escaping is what brought to him by Spiegelman. In the book, Vladek had said more than once that it’s Spiegelman who brings up all his memories about the Holocaust through the process of making Maus. Vladek’s request for Spiegelman to stop
时态上，叙述的故事，都应该用过去时
其他语法上大概有四处错误
This attempts to escape even leads to his father’s escape from him.中的attempts，不应该有s
This suggests that not only Spiegelman, Vladek is also trying to escape中，应该有not only Spiegelman,but Vladek is also( not only, but also)
But what he is escaping is what brought to him by Spiegelman.中，escape 是不及物动词，所以应该改为 But what he is escaping from is..
the father and the son is now separates from each other forever中，那个seperate应该是seperated
至于用词方面，看得出词汇不够，光escape就用过好几次，可以尝试用短语代替，比如run away, turn away, hide from等等