帮我看看这段话有没有语法上的错误?
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以下只是就原文做出的修改:
This story(既然是story,就应该全部用过去时。) is about a high school girl, called Miya.
She(建议用Miya) is(was) a girl, who has(had) a mother but no father.
She is(was) so common(common形容人不是很好,建议用ordinary) in his(应该是her) class that (建议加上even) her teachers can't(didn’t,不应该用can’t) know her name.
All of a sudden, when(when应该接过去时) she is(所以应该用was) told that she is(was) a princess of another country---the future successor ,she is(was) more than pleased.
And then,she becomes(became) a focus in media.
However,after all,(这两个词其实意思上重复,建议去掉after all)she was brought up in a poor family,and(brought up in a poor family和had no elegant royal quality并不是并列关系,而是因果关系,建议:For the reason that she was was brought up in a poor family,she had no elegant royal quality. ) she has(had) no elegant royal qualities(既然前面用no,这里应该用单数quality).
To train her to own these(these指代不明,前文根本没有提及指的是什么,应该用some) (建议加上elegant,因为上文有提及)royal qualities,he