UC知道请高手帮忙修改一篇雅思作文！最好给个分数，下个月我就考试了，先谢过了！！
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请高手帮我修改一篇雅思作文并给评估个分数？下个月我就考试了，先谢过了！！
task:
More and more people use the mobile phone or computer to communicate, and no longer write letters to each other. Some people think the skills of letter writing will soon disappear completely. Do you agree or disagree? How important do you think letter-writing is?
anwser:
In this day and age, mobile phones and computers are increasingly used all over the world, and play an imperative role in our society, communication has become simple by using this technology. But at the same time, controversy has letter writing is better able to solve problems. Some people assert the skill of writing will go extinct immediately. Speaking for myself, I believe their view is somewhat overly simplistic.
It is evident that in terms of information technology’s convenience and speediness advantage, the widespread use of mobile phones and computers may enhance the working efficiency. For one thing, cell phones and computers are l
task:
More and more people use the mobile phone or computer to communicate, and no longer write letters to each other. Some people think the skills of letter writing will soon disappear completely. Do you agree or disagree? How important do you think letter-writing is?
anwser:
In this day and age, mobile phones and computers are increasingly used all over the world, and play an imperative role in our society, communication has become simple by using this technology. But at the same time, controversy has letter writing is better able to solve problems. Some people assert the skill of writing will go extinct immediately. Speaking for myself, I believe their view is somewhat overly simplistic.
It is evident that in terms of information technology’s convenience and speediness advantage, the widespread use of mobile phones and computers may enhance the working efficiency. For one thing, cell phones and computers are l
5.5,因为题目的重点是要你讨论书信，但你又很大一部分篇幅写的是电脑和书信。我认为你应该在紧扣书信的同时，顺便拿电脑和书信作比较。一般雅思的审题，你要看后面部分，那才是讨论重点。不过语言还是很流畅的。
不用修改了