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演讲要求是 3-5分钟 希望路过的或者直达的都帮我看看有没有问题或者哪里需要改进，在下感激不尽！！！！！文章如下:
Learn from earthquake
Earthquake has destroyed a lot of houses, factories, schools and hospitals .large numbers of people were along and homeless .all the country was in an atmosphere of sorrow in a long time.
But that’s not all, because we are still here, we must learn something from the disaster.
There must be a lot of people had taken their dreams into graves ,they wanted to do something after May 12th ,but they followed the step of the god during the earthquake .if you don’t want to miss something you really would like to ,just take action at once ,don’t say tomorrow or even the day after tomorrow .
Occasionally, our life could not always be easy, we may meet a lot of troubles in daily life .we should fight for a life rather than live a life .just as a survivor who recovers from earthquake says, I t
首先分析一下一楼所说的两个错误，楼主的认识确实有点偏差，你这两句确实有些问题：
第一句，无语法错误，但不通顺，最好改为：But that is not all, we must learn something from the disaster because we are still here. 这个其实和语文一样，就是语句不通顺而已。另外，在书面语中，尽量不要用缩写，就是that is 不要写成 that's，这样不规范的。
第二句，有语病，应该为There must be a lot of people 【who】 had taken their dreams into graves. They wanted to do something after May 12th ,but they followed the 【steps】of the god during the earthquake. 这句话给你切分为两句，因为第一句的意思已经完整了，应该句号，后面的归为另外一句。理由和语文作文是一样的。有语法错误的地方用【】标出来了，第一个就不用多说了，从句的问题；第二个是一定要用复数的。
另外，一下是其他可以考虑更改的地方：
1、we may meet a lot of troubles in daily life【，so】we should fight for a life rather than live a life，理由是这两句话应该放在一个句子里，这样才能表达一个完整的意思
2、just as 【what】a survivor who recovers from earthquake 【said】， I told myself 【that】I can go through the trouble when I was in the ruin【，】 so 【I was saved after 30 hours】. 又是从句的问题，另外由于这个生还者已经说了这番话，复述应该用过去式。最后一句语法很有问题，我帮你全改了。
3、To 【stengthen】yourself...不是strong，查查字典吧
4、we may want to help others,