这句话我这么翻译可以么？谢谢！在线等急~

可以的

差不多哦

The computer system of Chinese transport company has not received the note for change. Please amend the name and confirm it to us as soon as possible.
Please also send me the changed B/L (fax it to me or send me the scan). Also, you should authorize the validity of the fax for us to pick up the goods

根据字面翻译

The electrical system of Chinese transport company hasn't received the change yet, so please conduct and confirm it ASAP (as soon as possible)
Additional: please scan and fax the changed B/L to us ASAP, and authorize the validity of the fax.

电子系统实际上是数据库，楼主的意思是表达数据没有被变更。
The data in the Chinese shipping company's database has not been updated yet,pls check and figure it out ASAP.
Additional,pls send us the scaned image of the new B/L or fax it to us,dont forget to authorize the availability of the copy,thus we can pick up the goods.

China's shipping company within the electronic system had not ye