UC知道帮忙改下雅思英语作文啊~急！
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我7号就要考雅思了 平时都没怎么练作文 现在只好赶紧练练笔 哪位高手帮忙指点下我的思路 行文结构 句法句式什么的~不甚感激啊~~
题目：In many countries traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the rapid development of economy and society,the tendency of globalization sweeped the most of countries.Meanwhile,international fast food gradually occupied our daily live and our traditional foods are being replaced.Obviously,the phenomenon largely influced either our familes or the whole societies.
In the first instance,the appearance of fast food affect people’s traditionally domestic life styles.In the past,family members used to eat at home,enjoying the harmony that was passed from close relatives when they after school or off duty .Whereas now the majority of people,especially youngsters,are sweet on the fast foods,like KFC,Subway and so forth. The direct effect is people no longer eat around a big t
题目：In many countries traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the rapid development of economy and society,the tendency of globalization sweeped the most of countries.Meanwhile,international fast food gradually occupied our daily live and our traditional foods are being replaced.Obviously,the phenomenon largely influced either our familes or the whole societies.
In the first instance,the appearance of fast food affect people’s traditionally domestic life styles.In the past,family members used to eat at home,enjoying the harmony that was passed from close relatives when they after school or off duty .Whereas now the majority of people,especially youngsters,are sweet on the fast foods,like KFC,Subway and so forth. The direct effect is people no longer eat around a big t
感觉很多语病。
很多句子读起来都怪怪的。而且“Although each nutshell has concave and convex sides,it would be wrong to say that fast foods are completely useless to humankind”翻译过来变成虽然事物有好有坏，但是说快餐对人完全没用是不对的。应该去掉although.