帮找一下英语作文是否有语病

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/08 19:28:16
Ithink Tieling will be a famous city in 50years. There will be more flowers and more trees in Tieling.There will be more tall buildings and more apartments too. There will be less pollution and more plants in Tieling .More and more people will come to Tieling.And people will play sports everyday. People will live to be 500 years old. There will be a space station in space. People won't use money,and they won't go to school,they study at home on computers. Will people build some rockets? Of caurse ,LiuYuxuan will build more and more rockets.
This is my dream,I hope that Tieling will be a famous city (is possible)

最后一句 +括号的句子 是否有语病 另外LiuYuxuan是人名 Tieling 是地名
帮着看下全文有无错误

建议变换下句型。
will 的句型有得太多了。
还可以用
be going to do 句型
to do 句型

有些不一定用will 句型，可以转换成别的表达

比如说。将来人的寿命都能活到500岁
In future, people can live to 500.

重复只用一个句型不是一个好选择。

……

I hope that it is possible for Tieling ti be a famous city.

人们能过500岁。People will live to 500 years old.
他们在家用电脑学习。They will study at home with their computers.
制造火箭 make rockets

很多,不过错的上面已经有了,别说我抄袭