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However, the happy times were always so short, he did't even had the
chance to have anything left, didn't had the chance to do more...The courses
of his assassination shocked me. The world mourned.I also think that this was
a pity. Maybe his personality made him to had a lot of enemies.? Or was the
unsuccessful candidate's trap? In November 22, 1963, this tragic day, when
the President and his young wife entered the street. Suddenly heard the
words "Bang! Bang!", Two shots and then a few other sounds. Peoples saw
the President's body suddenly went down, on his wife's lap. They sent him to
the hospital but after 30 minites he died.
However, the happy times were always so short, he did't even HAVE
chance to have anything left,and he didn't had the chance to do more...The courses
of his assassination SHOCK me. The world WAS mourned.I also think that all of these was
a pity. Maybe his personality made him had a lot of enemies.? Or was the
candidate's trap unsuccessful ? ON November 22, 1963, this tragic day, when
the President and his young wife entered the street. Suddenly PEOPLE heard the
SOUNDS "Bang! Bang!", Two shots BREAK OUT AFTER THE SOUNDS. Peoples saw
the President's body FALLING down, on his wife's lap. They sent him to
the hospital but after 30 minites he died.
帮你改了，大写的都是改的地方，你重新读一下吧，楼上的那个家伙的言论你别管他~~ 希望你的作文能成功哦~~~ (*^__^*) 加油！
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我觉得你的文章是中式思维的，还是重写吧，没法改，全篇一个连接词都没有，我很无语