英语自我介绍问题

上面你写的不是已经很好了吗，加上你的名字和学校地址就好了

Hello everyone
I am ...from...junior high school
I an so glad to be here for the interview
TO be an airhost is my favourite choice
I am always helpful and active during my school life
I enjoy the feeling of being an airhost on planes
It is my dream that i will work as an airhost to serve the passengers one day
Now i study hard in other to improve myself,especially learn my English and Chinese better
I believe that Iwill be accepted
Thank you

上面你写已经很好了，加上你的名字和学校地址就好了

I am from junior high school. I am very greatful to be here and have the chance of this precious interview. To be an airhost is my greatest dream and my favourite choice. I am an active students in the school, and honoured as a helpful student. To work on the plane as an airhost is my greatest dream, and the most enjoyable feeling for me. It is my dream to work as an airhost to serve my passengers as good as I can. I am tr