帮忙改英语日记…

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/15 14:21:08
第一次写英语日记！大家帮我改出错误…some time.I can't to control myself.but always to keep my behavior better as much as possible ! I have burden . the burden is big enough. In my Qzone's signature i write down that every moment and every tings are all around the king Hong~ Nowadays! I afraid to read again!Because I have not reach my goal! Entrance examination will coming! When I looking my score I feeling very sad! Because I come back already 3 mouth!First I have not pass,just 357!Although I have 428 in recently exam!But it away from the cutting score! what can I do for my career! In today before yesterday.I was careless which I lose my mp4 in the street when I riding my bicycle! I search for around the corner! But I can't to find! Less than 1 minute!

…some times.,I can't control myself.But I always try to make my behavior better as much as possible ! I have a big burden. In my Qzone's signature I wrote down what every moment around me that is king Hong~ Nowadays! I afraid to read it again!Because I have not reach my goal! Entrance examination is coming! When I looking at my score I feel very sad. Because I have already come back for about 3 mouths! The first time I did not pass,only got 357!Although I got 428 in recently exam,but it is far away from the cutting score! what can I do for my career! In today before yesterday.I was so careless that I lost my mp4 in the street when I was riding my bicycle! I searched it all around the corner! But I can't find it! Just after 1 minute!

你叫我怎么改，搞笑，单词量还行，语法一窍不通，我就讲最严重的，to是介词，你表当动词用，我女朋友就经常这样用，搞我每次都得忍着不笑…

楼上说错了，不是把to当动词用，而是动词前多加了一个to。
其他有标点用错，中文式英语等等。
Sometimes I can't control myself, though I always want to keep my behavior as good as possible! I hav