帮我纠正下语法错误

来源:百度知道 编辑:UC知道 时间:2024/05/30 06:37:49
There is no fear
To be the one you want to be
Don't try to live so wise
No one can live their life in the way they want
U must know
It's not okey to be gay
So just go away
A better life is waiting for you
From now on
Try to study hard
Try to build your body
Try to be a real man
U know you could do that
Forget the pain you ever had
Forget that they had laugh at you
Forget everything you ever want most but fail last
Come on
Have you ever thought that your family have begun to lean on you
U have your family
U can't disappoint them
Hold on
And just be
U know you can
For a better life
For you
For everyone
Now
It's your responsibility
Ha Ha
You can laugh
Yes you can
Smile again
Do you ever remember
A sentence you never fail to fascinate
Every day is So wonderful

Don't try to live so wise (wise不是副词)

No one can live their life(lives) in the way they want (个人觉得有逻辑错误,有些人可以的啊,你用not everyone好一点)

Forget the pain you('ve) ever had
Forget that they had laugh at you(Forget that you are laughed at被动就该这些时候用嘛)
Forget everything you ever want most but fail last (有错而且不地道,很多句都不地道,并且逻辑怪异U have your family ,U can't disappoint them 等等Come on ,Hold on,just be 等等,你到底叫他不要做gay还是鼓舞他继续gay啊。。。)

如果你要给外国人看的话,他会觉得你说话很奇怪,但整体意思还是懂的~BYE