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Hello,
My name is ~~. I am 18 years old and live in Kunming, Yunnan. I have just graduated from the senior middle school. My interests are collecting all kinds of plane models. When I was a child, I found myself wanting every model commercial airplane available, I was building model airplanes; I would stare into the sky watching the planes about to land at the airport in my hometown. And the first flight for me was the travel to ~~ when I was ~~years old. And that short time flight impacted my life at that young age. Not only did I stay up the whole flight looking out the window, but I did not want to get off the plane after we landed. It was at this point that becoming a pilot became my dream.
But to say the least... I was hooked on planes. Sometimes I would turn to fly computer flight learned a lot of skills. Although flying on the computer is fun, it simply did not match real thing. I am now realizing that I cannot get rid of the passion to become an airline pilot. I