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一件难忘的事情(An Unforgetful Thing)
Today, I'll talk about my unforgettabal stories. How time flies!I'm twenty-four years now.During the long time,there was one thing that I will never forget.
The Spring Festival is our traditional festival.During the Spring Festival,people usually visit their friends and relatives.In the new year's day, my family took the bus to my grandparents' to say "Happy New Year" to them.
In the bus,I had a good seat.At 7:30,the bus came to a village.A woman got on with a baby in her arms.At that time,there was no seat.But she must look after her baby carefully.She had to stand next to me.I wanted to stand up and let her sit down,but I was afraid of hearing the other people say"That boy want to be praised."I looked around.Most people were looking out of the windows and some were sleeping.Suddenly,a little boy behind me,stood up and made room for the woman.She said "Thank you very much" with a big smile.Th
Today, I'll talk about my unforgettabal stories. How time flies!I'm twenty-four years now.During the long time,there was one thing that I will never forget.
The Spring Festival is our traditional festival.During the Spring Festival,people usually visit their friends and relatives.In the new year's day, my family took the bus to my grandparents' to say "Happy New Year" to them.
In the bus,I had a good seat.At 7:30,the bus came to a village.A woman got on with a baby in her arms.At that time,there was no seat.But she must look after her baby carefully.She had to stand next to me.I wanted to stand up and let her sit down,but I was afraid of hearing the other people say"That boy want to be praised."I looked around.Most people were looking out of the windows and some were sleeping.Suddenly,a little boy behind me,stood up and made room for the woman.She said "Thank you very much" with a big smile.Th
1.第一句我觉得改为“Now,I'd like to talk about my ……”会好点。
2.第三句应是“I'm twenty-four years old now.”缺了“old”了。
3.在“The Spring Festival is our traditional festival”前加上“As we all known”会好点，O(∩_∩)O~
4.“In the new year's day”指具体某一天，用“On”
5."In the bus"改为“On the bus”
6."But she must look after her baby carefully.She had to stand next to me."无转折关系。反而是因果关系的，我觉得改为“In order to look after her baby better,she lean on me”
7."That boy want to be praised."改为“wants”
8."do our best to help people who need help"中"need"改为"needs"
当我后来告诉我的表弟这件事的时候，他说：“儿童是成人之父”。